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| Take the Money and Run 2008-02-24 ch 1,   | This poem is nice and strong in its simplicity. i particularly like the line "Peel me away from this scenery." the flow of the ending is a bit inconsistent, i would suggest maybe changing the last two lines so its one line. a little more puncuation might help in this poem, too, like adding a comma after the fourth line, and a period after the fifth. but still great job on this --SB, review marathon (marathon link in my profile if youre bored/interested) |