Reviews for Communication Overload

sylvia's syndrome
2008-07-08
ch 1,

i like this a lot but i'm not a big fan of the lines that offer commentary-- "it's kind of sickening" and the last four lines. they're not as strong as the description and i think they throw of the flow of the description. also not sure if it was necessary to repeat the first line. good work on the whole. keep writing.

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